
KoolKolle
Hier ein schon länger da liegender Text von mir, an den ich mich jetzt endlich mal ranwagen will, daraus ein Lied zu machen.
Die Ausführungen des jungen Königs hatten mich daran erinnert.
Es geht in dem text zum Einen um eine Trennung und zum Anderen um das Erwachsenwerden. Weil mir die Trennung damals recht nah ging, schrieb ich in Bildern. Die Sprache ist vielleicht fast für den äußeren Inhalt des Textes zu modern, aber mich persönlich stört das nicht.
Was sagt ihr dazu?
Sind die Bilder verständlich, funktionieren sie für euch?
the fallen knight
1.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
and it seems like I'll have to fight
for your love and for my life,
I'm still young, so I have to seek my quest
just wanted to be the best
To serve and to protect your realm
just to be what I am
I knew what to do to save us two,
when I felt that my fate (is) are you (is würde besser klingen, auch wennes falsch ist)
I failed, didn't think that I would
Oh, I don't deserve the knighthood
any more
2.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
now it seems like I have to fight
for your love and for my life,
My mission was to fight against
demons of the past inside myself
I am weak from that demon's legacy
many enemies defeated me
(schade dass man legacy nicht so auspricht wie ich damals dachte, hat jemand ne Idee für n besseren Reim?)
So weak, oh I used to run away
wish I'd met you another day
breaking the rules of chivalry
made my life a misery
Once, it was two years ago
I took off my rida' boots you know
Every man needs to ride
To be himself and feel his pride/
And
Chorus:
//now you can listen to my song/
Me and my steed ridin' on///
and on…
3.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
now I know that I'll have to fight
for my quest, to get alive
I am doomed since you cast me out
of your realm and my last resort
is my reason speaking to me,
tellin' me how to forge my sword
"Iron will is heated by your love
and the blaze of anger
forge it on the anvil of truth
with the fate's hammer
Water of wisdom for
eternal durability/
the sword of reason
requires all your abilities/"
it's time
now I have to forge my sword/
it's time
now I have to use my sword
it's time//
Put on my armour suite
it's time
get on my steed again/
Out there it is dangerous
legions of demons came to us/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
Chorus:
//now you can listen to my song/
Me and my steed ridin' on///
and on…
//This is no place to be
take me away my steed//
far away from here/
Since you banished me/
You can see me/
As a lonely rider/
In the sunset/
going my way//
Auch für die Entdeckung grammatikalischer Unstimmigkeiten bin ich dankbar!
Die Ausführungen des jungen Königs hatten mich daran erinnert.
Es geht in dem text zum Einen um eine Trennung und zum Anderen um das Erwachsenwerden. Weil mir die Trennung damals recht nah ging, schrieb ich in Bildern. Die Sprache ist vielleicht fast für den äußeren Inhalt des Textes zu modern, aber mich persönlich stört das nicht.
Was sagt ihr dazu?
Sind die Bilder verständlich, funktionieren sie für euch?
the fallen knight
1.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
and it seems like I'll have to fight
for your love and for my life,
I'm still young, so I have to seek my quest
just wanted to be the best
To serve and to protect your realm
just to be what I am
I knew what to do to save us two,
when I felt that my fate (is) are you (is würde besser klingen, auch wennes falsch ist)
I failed, didn't think that I would
Oh, I don't deserve the knighthood
any more
2.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
now it seems like I have to fight
for your love and for my life,
My mission was to fight against
demons of the past inside myself
I am weak from that demon's legacy
many enemies defeated me
(schade dass man legacy nicht so auspricht wie ich damals dachte, hat jemand ne Idee für n besseren Reim?)
So weak, oh I used to run away
wish I'd met you another day
breaking the rules of chivalry
made my life a misery
Once, it was two years ago
I took off my rida' boots you know
Every man needs to ride
To be himself and feel his pride/
And
Chorus:
//now you can listen to my song/
Me and my steed ridin' on///
and on…
3.
I feel like a fallen knight, oh
since you left my life
now I know that I'll have to fight
for my quest, to get alive
I am doomed since you cast me out
of your realm and my last resort
is my reason speaking to me,
tellin' me how to forge my sword
"Iron will is heated by your love
and the blaze of anger
forge it on the anvil of truth
with the fate's hammer
Water of wisdom for
eternal durability/
the sword of reason
requires all your abilities/"
it's time
now I have to forge my sword/
it's time
now I have to use my sword
it's time//
Put on my armour suite
it's time
get on my steed again/
Out there it is dangerous
legions of demons came to us/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
but I train to use my combat gear
fulfill my quest and have no fear/
Chorus:
//now you can listen to my song/
Me and my steed ridin' on///
and on…
//This is no place to be
take me away my steed//
far away from here/
Since you banished me/
You can see me/
As a lonely rider/
In the sunset/
going my way//
Auch für die Entdeckung grammatikalischer Unstimmigkeiten bin ich dankbar!