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Hallo Leute, wie sagt man so schön? Ich bin mit meinem Latain am Ende...
Ich versuche mich seit mehreren Monaten an 2 neuen Texten.
Leider bin ich von den Ergebnissen bisher nicht begeistert.
Vllt hat ja einer von Euch Lyrikern noch bessere Ideen, um die Texte brauchbar zu machen!?
Text 1
when we two parted
in trouble and tears
with broken hearted
after long years
when we two parted
your shadow came over me
your look me deceived
it felt like a warning
in silence i grieve
when we two parted
of what I feel now
colder your kiss
that my heart could forget
sorrow of this
when we two parted
all vows are broken
after long years
when we two parted
in trouble and tears
Text 2 (Change ?)
today's the day my life is gonna change
i've got to get up off the floor
there's another world and its waiting for us
i've waited so long for so much more
Change
tonight's the first night of my new life
saying goodbye to everyone I've ever known
and we could spend the night together
i could be you and you could be me too
Change
the sun sets so early in November
the moon is bright and my heart is black
promise me you'll always remember
never find our way back
Change
i was raining and I wanted to be the ocean
was a star and I wanted to be the sun
they want from us what they cannot touch
lost and found and glory bound for so long
i've waited so long
someone like you...
Bin für jede Hilfe dankbar. Kürzer wäre vllt auch besser?
Dank und Gruß
Marco
Ich versuche mich seit mehreren Monaten an 2 neuen Texten.
Leider bin ich von den Ergebnissen bisher nicht begeistert.
Vllt hat ja einer von Euch Lyrikern noch bessere Ideen, um die Texte brauchbar zu machen!?
Text 1
when we two parted
in trouble and tears
with broken hearted
after long years
when we two parted
your shadow came over me
your look me deceived
it felt like a warning
in silence i grieve
when we two parted
of what I feel now
colder your kiss
that my heart could forget
sorrow of this
when we two parted
all vows are broken
after long years
when we two parted
in trouble and tears
Text 2 (Change ?)
today's the day my life is gonna change
i've got to get up off the floor
there's another world and its waiting for us
i've waited so long for so much more
Change
tonight's the first night of my new life
saying goodbye to everyone I've ever known
and we could spend the night together
i could be you and you could be me too
Change
the sun sets so early in November
the moon is bright and my heart is black
promise me you'll always remember
never find our way back
Change
i was raining and I wanted to be the ocean
was a star and I wanted to be the sun
they want from us what they cannot touch
lost and found and glory bound for so long
i've waited so long
someone like you...
Bin für jede Hilfe dankbar. Kürzer wäre vllt auch besser?
Dank und Gruß
Marco
