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Hallo musizierendes Volk,
ich habe einen Text geschrieben und würde den gern hier einmal "vorstellen" bevor ich ihn aufnehme, um eventuelle englische "Ungereimtheiten" auszuschließen oder andersweitiges durch euer [g=94]Feedback[/g] noch ändern zu können.
Klar interessiert mich auch, wie euch der Text gefällt.
Würde mich freuen, wenn der ein oder andere sich die Zeit nimmt und meine Zeilen ließt!
Ich bedanke mich schonmal recht herzlich und freue mich auf Antworten!
Gruß an euch!
Und hier der Text:
Verse 1
There’s a place, that you once owned
You breathed bloom into its midst,
And that space that felt like home,
Was modeled by you and your kiss.
And we did know when we met there,
That it was a place of love
But what to do, when we forget that
We have to take care about?
( gesprochen: )
Did this castle of roses
Turned to a castle of stone?
Did you leave me because
That bloom is gone?
Refrain:
And for the days that we did have
You will not go a stony road
You will not try to lose your head
With me anymore
Will you tell me, that it’s over now?
Will you leave me all alone?
What was build in years, went in a moment
Of crying telephones!
Verse 2
And this place turned empty now
Is as black as it can be
Cause you did leave it with your mind and hold
And hold the key.
And all that was build on the basement of our love
Is lying ‘round my neck like a gin
And your pictures eat my head,
And your words bor in my skin
( gesprochen: )
The hole this place is now
Is my left stony road
I cannot choose to lose my head,
My head is lost.
Refrain
ich habe einen Text geschrieben und würde den gern hier einmal "vorstellen" bevor ich ihn aufnehme, um eventuelle englische "Ungereimtheiten" auszuschließen oder andersweitiges durch euer [g=94]Feedback[/g] noch ändern zu können.
Klar interessiert mich auch, wie euch der Text gefällt.
Würde mich freuen, wenn der ein oder andere sich die Zeit nimmt und meine Zeilen ließt!
Ich bedanke mich schonmal recht herzlich und freue mich auf Antworten!
Gruß an euch!
Und hier der Text:
Verse 1
There’s a place, that you once owned
You breathed bloom into its midst,
And that space that felt like home,
Was modeled by you and your kiss.
And we did know when we met there,
That it was a place of love
But what to do, when we forget that
We have to take care about?
( gesprochen: )
Did this castle of roses
Turned to a castle of stone?
Did you leave me because
That bloom is gone?
Refrain:
And for the days that we did have
You will not go a stony road
You will not try to lose your head
With me anymore
Will you tell me, that it’s over now?
Will you leave me all alone?
What was build in years, went in a moment
Of crying telephones!
Verse 2
And this place turned empty now
Is as black as it can be
Cause you did leave it with your mind and hold
And hold the key.
And all that was build on the basement of our love
Is lying ‘round my neck like a gin
And your pictures eat my head,
And your words bor in my skin
( gesprochen: )
The hole this place is now
Is my left stony road
I cannot choose to lose my head,
My head is lost.
Refrain