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Hi Leute, ich bin momentan dran für eine Freundin von mir ein Lied zu schreiben...und ich würde mich freuen hier ein paar Kritiken/Ideen zu bekommen. Ein hinweis ist schonmal, dass ich ihn vorher schonmal wesentlich komplizierter hatte und viel mehr Inhalt, aber das ließ sich mit dem Lied eher schwer vereinbaren.
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Strophe 1
So many human beings I met on my way through life
And everytime i was right, thinking they were special
But never in a way matching with my values
Too late, my heart was blind
And played their game
And so I stand here with a fragile heart
No real trust in women
Could we go now one step further
Or will it be a never ending dream of mine
I would like to paint a picture made of stars
Which will be shining just to make you smile
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
There is something special about you
Strophe 2
When I decided not to feel for a long long time
The gentle breath of sun, warming you on a cold winterday
Then you brighted my heart and you patched the fragments
Now I got a crush on you and you don't know
So now its time to do something, to let you know
Could we go now one step further
Or will it be a never ending dream of mine
I would like to paint a picture made of stars,
Which will be shining just to make you smile
Can you see it?
Can you feel it?
Can you hear it?
May I ever have a chance to be with
Can you see it?
Can you feel it?
Can you hear it?
May I ever have a chance to be with you?
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
there is something special about you
Interlude
Let me show what I know
(Show what I know)
Please let this dream come true
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
There is something special about you
Why do we both have to see us far apart
Let me show that I know, there's something about you
[Edit: ein paar kleine -i- durch -I- ersetzt ;D ]
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Strophe 1
So many human beings I met on my way through life
And everytime i was right, thinking they were special
But never in a way matching with my values
Too late, my heart was blind
And played their game
And so I stand here with a fragile heart
No real trust in women
Could we go now one step further
Or will it be a never ending dream of mine
I would like to paint a picture made of stars
Which will be shining just to make you smile
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
There is something special about you
Strophe 2
When I decided not to feel for a long long time
The gentle breath of sun, warming you on a cold winterday
Then you brighted my heart and you patched the fragments
Now I got a crush on you and you don't know
So now its time to do something, to let you know
Could we go now one step further
Or will it be a never ending dream of mine
I would like to paint a picture made of stars,
Which will be shining just to make you smile
Can you see it?
Can you feel it?
Can you hear it?
May I ever have a chance to be with
Can you see it?
Can you feel it?
Can you hear it?
May I ever have a chance to be with you?
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
there is something special about you
Interlude
Let me show what I know
(Show what I know)
Please let this dream come true
Refrain
Why do we both have to see each other far apart
My heart will beat for you
Let me show that I know,
There is something special about you
Why do we both have to see us far apart
Let me show that I know, there's something about you
[Edit: ein paar kleine -i- durch -I- ersetzt ;D ]