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Hallo
Dies ist mein erster Text, wird eine pop/rock ballade..
Könntet ihr das mal durchlesen und korrigieren ?
danke im voraus
Take me Away
Verse 1
When I needed sunshine, I got rain
When I needed loving, I got pain
I thought I found someone, to hold my hand
But life keeps on turning,
my dreams into sand
Refrain
Take me away (Take me away)
Save me from this world of grey
Take me away (Take me away)
Be my sunshine when it rains
Take me away (Take me away)
Save me from this world of grey
Take me away (Take me away)
Hold me or I will go astray
Verse 2
When I needed day, I got night
When I needed peace, I got a fight
Oh I’m tired of this masquerade
But I can’t show my feelings, I’m too afraid
Refrain
Bridge
Hey, life could be so grand
If you would take me to your wonderland
Where life is easy and full of happiness
Cause right now, my world is just a mess
Will you take care of my heart?
Or will you tear it apart?
Will you help me through the night?
Please come and hold me tight
Refrain
Dies ist mein erster Text, wird eine pop/rock ballade..
Könntet ihr das mal durchlesen und korrigieren ?
danke im voraus
Take me Away
Verse 1
When I needed sunshine, I got rain
When I needed loving, I got pain
I thought I found someone, to hold my hand
But life keeps on turning,
my dreams into sand
Refrain
Take me away (Take me away)
Save me from this world of grey
Take me away (Take me away)
Be my sunshine when it rains
Take me away (Take me away)
Save me from this world of grey
Take me away (Take me away)
Hold me or I will go astray
Verse 2
When I needed day, I got night
When I needed peace, I got a fight
Oh I’m tired of this masquerade
But I can’t show my feelings, I’m too afraid
Refrain
Bridge
Hey, life could be so grand
If you would take me to your wonderland
Where life is easy and full of happiness
Cause right now, my world is just a mess
Will you take care of my heart?
Or will you tear it apart?
Will you help me through the night?
Please come and hold me tight
Refrain