ice_star
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Hey alle. Ich habe einen Text geschrieben und würde mich über konstruktive Rückmeldung(en) freuen.
Mich treiben v.a. folgende Fragen um:
Look up and get lost
How in the world can I believe
The promise of the night sky
I say to myself
When it’s too good to be true
That there’s just heaven
And no hell
I don’t, I don’t, I don’t
Fall for that spell again
I know, I know, I know
Logic can not be bent
Even the brightest lights
Flicker at night
I’m gonna take my time
To figure out the chaos in the night sky
And in my mind
It’s my pace and my finish line
Someday the stars will align
What on earth do you see
When you look up in a starry night
What does it tell you
Don’t stay in your comfort zone alone
Dreams still can come true
You say
I don’t, I don’t, I don’t
Fall for that spell my friend
I know, I know, I know
Logic can not be bent
Even the brightest lights
Flicker sometimes
And this will take some time
To figure out the chaos of the night sky
Enjoy the ride
You set your pace and the finish line
Tonight the stars may align
Go ahead, look up and get lost
Go ahead, look up and get lost
Go ahead, look up and get lost
Mich treiben v.a. folgende Fragen um:
- Ist der Text als Einheit erkennbar/ Wo sind unklare Bezüge/"Themenwechsel"?
- Welche Themen sind direkt erkennbar?
- Worüber stolpert ihr/Gibt es irgendwelche Sackgassen?
Look up and get lost
How in the world can I believe
The promise of the night sky
I say to myself
When it’s too good to be true
That there’s just heaven
And no hell
I don’t, I don’t, I don’t
Fall for that spell again
I know, I know, I know
Logic can not be bent
Even the brightest lights
Flicker at night
I’m gonna take my time
To figure out the chaos in the night sky
And in my mind
It’s my pace and my finish line
Someday the stars will align
What on earth do you see
When you look up in a starry night
What does it tell you
Don’t stay in your comfort zone alone
Dreams still can come true
You say
I don’t, I don’t, I don’t
Fall for that spell my friend
I know, I know, I know
Logic can not be bent
Even the brightest lights
Flicker sometimes
And this will take some time
To figure out the chaos of the night sky
Enjoy the ride
You set your pace and the finish line
Tonight the stars may align
Go ahead, look up and get lost
Go ahead, look up and get lost
Go ahead, look up and get lost